Drabble : These Things

[menolly-au.livejournal.com]

 

Title: These Things
Author: menolly_au
Rating: PG(13)
Warning : Violence


Drabble written for the three things challenge - a baseball bat, a book shelf and a horror movie.

 

There are things that Wilson can never forget

 

                      the sight of the door crashing open, the men invading his house
 

                      the way the baseball bats looked in their hands, the pain as they hit him

                      the horror movie playing on the television, the soundtrack covering his screams
 

                      the crawl to the bookcase for his cell phone, the blood staining the floor
 

                      the long wait for help in the dark, the flashing lights of the ambulance

 

This thing he will always remember

 

                      waking up in hospital with House sitting by his side
 

                       “They got them Jimmy. You're safe, it's over.”

 

 

Comments

[resm.livejournal.com]

Great imagery! You caught the scene so vividly with just a few words, hats off to you.

[menolly-au.livejournal.com]

Thank you :) I love playing with the drabble format - its amazing what you can fit in 100 words :)

[srsly-yes.livejournal.com]

Very powerful drabble. Love how you prefaced and concluded it--and everything in between.

[menolly-au.livejournal.com]

Thanks! Glad you liked it :)

[yarroway.livejournal.com]

Fabulous! I loved this--so stark and powerful.

[menolly-au.livejournal.com]

Thank you, glad it worked for you :)

[barefootpuddles.livejournal.com]

the horror movie playing on the television, the soundtrack covering his screams

Oh my, poor Wilson!


I loved the comparison between the subtitles - the things Wilson will never forget and the things he will always remember. Nicely put. :)

[menolly-au.livejournal.com]

Thanks! Yeah, poor Wilson indeed :)

[menolly-au.livejournal.com]

It would be a nice thing to wake up to :)

[alternatealto.livejournal.com]

Your imagery is very intense. I liked the "never forget / always remember" dichotomy, too. The last two lines were a perfect ending for the story!

[menolly-au.livejournal.com]

Thanks! A little House makes everything better :)

[fleurione.livejournal.com]

aw :) (because there's houst at the end)

I like the comparison between things he can't forget, and things he will remember - the intention behind the memories of both sets.

[menolly-au.livejournal.com]

Thanks, couldn't resist putting House in there to provide at least a little bit of comfort for poor wilson :)

[3rdgal12.livejournal.com]

Poor Wilson! Horrific beginning but so worth the ending. Nicely done!